I am participating in the Blogging from A to Z April Challenge all this month.
Today’s alphabet is C. My 55 fiction begins with this cute letter ‘C’
Countless emotions clouded his heart and mind during that brief instant he was submerged in the waters. He heard her smile, saw her laughter, smelt her touch and touched her affectionate scent. She was with him in his watery grave while he had abandoned her on a bright and sunny day. She had loved him.
By Sulekha Rawat
I am participating in the blogging from A to Z Challenge from 1-30 April, 2014 and this post is written as a part of that challenge. Check out some amazing participating blogs here. My theme for the challenge is 55 Fiction, stories in 55 words. I hope you enjoyed my story today.
Awww…broke my heart in the end…
Well it reminded me of this song "Gori Teri Ankhein" :
That is one lovely song! Trust me, as soon as I read this post I got reminded of this song only 🙂 Thanks for the link!
~S(t)ri
Participant|AtoZ Challenge 2014
Smile, it makes (y)our day!
Love the song, thanks for the link and your comment.
🙁 Loving your narrative but hope this ends well!
Me too, hope is a wonderful thing 🙂 thanks
Oh Sulekha., very emotional post today. I wanted to stretch out my hand and dragged him out of the water… You have an amazing way with words, lady:-) Way to go!
Eli, I am so touched by your compliment, love it. Already thinking of the next part 🙂
She indeed had loved him. Sad for him though. Very well penned Sulekha!
Gauri, thank you for the lovely comment.
wow! you do have a special way with words
I am lovin it…this challenge is a wonderful platform for relationships building 🙂 thanks
Very emotional. This particular post made my heart skip a beat 🙁
~S(t)ri
Participant|AtoZ Challenge 2014
Smile, it makes (y)our day!
Stri, Your comment made my heart do the same 🙂 thank you
Awww sad end !
Ananya, end is many parts away 🙂
Another great 55F!
Thank you again.
So thats how it is. The interlinked posts are great Sulekha. Today's was beautiful.
Ishithaa
#AtoZChallenge
Thanks, i am trying to write a story built on many mini stories.
Oh my God…this is so sad…Another gr8 piece..
I hope to make it happy soon, thanks
Fantastic imagery, Sulekha! I like how the thread continues!
Thanks a ton, Corinne. The thread will go on till I can stretch it 🙂
That was sad put me into a pensive mood. But very well written.
Sorry for it, Suzy… thanks for the compliment.
"He heard her smile, saw her laughter, smelt her touch and touched her affectionate scent." — this is so Gulzar-like! Great line. Speaks so much of love, and lovingly.
I love it that you compared my humble writing to Gulzar sahib's…thanks a ton..
this is becoming intense … waiting for more
Rajlakshmi
#atozchallenge
Hope I can deliver…thanks
beautiful!!!! Love the way you are connecting ..this one leaves with a tear
Shiva
Your comment left me with a smile 🙂 thanks.
Reminded of the ending of Ashiqui 2 🙁
I know, it does look similar…well time to change the flow now 🙂 thanks
Sad piece Sulekha but well written 🙂
Thank you Sunila.
How sad is this!! I have often wondered what people think while they're drowning – images of people they love would surely be in their minds. Your protagonist seems to be dealing with heavy guilt.
He is literally drowning in guilt… I wonder too about how they must feel before they lose consciousness 🙁
Sad yet beautiful!
Thanks Sheetal.
That is such a sad story. Brilliantly written.♥
Love your compliment, 🙂
What a poetic picture you weave in just 55 words, Sulekha. I admire your talent. Simply blown away by that pathos in the man's face.
I admire your parenting posts 🙂 thanks a ton, shailaja.
Nooo that is sooo sad..
Richa
I know 🙂 thanks
She was loyal. I can imagine how he felt!
Vidya, he will regret it forever 🙂 thank you.
Sad and intense…
Thanks Sitara.
Sad. But he got paid for what he did.
He did, right? But maybe he had a reason 🙂
Oh my God..sad, but, he did regret his actions.
Yes, pooja, he did but was he too late? Thanks
Very tragic and what a waste! 🙁
I agree, a waste of a gift. thanks
Very powerful! You said so much in so few words!
Gosh! That's heart wrenching! 😐