Eyes – A Story

Blogging from A to Z April Challenge

The letter E is today’s prompt and my story begins with it.

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Eyes closed, Shiva drifted in and out of consciousness with Sia’s name on his lips like a chant. Just when she was within his arm’s reach, he was pulled back and his head was held out of the water by his rescuer. His lungs bursting with salt water and helplessness at his failure, he wept.

By Sulekha Rawat

I am participating in the blogging from A to Z Challenge from 1-30 April, 2014 and this post is written as a part of that challenge. Check out some amazing participating blogs hereMy theme for the challenge is 55 Fiction, stories in 55 words. I hope you enjoyed my story today.

30 thoughts on “Eyes – A Story

  1. Maybe Sia didn't want him to succeed in drowning. So her wish came true, that's a success for him, right?

  2. Aah! His turmoil and his feeling of inadequacy has come out so well, Sulekha! Liked this a lot!

  3. Nice post. Very sad though. "Just when she was within his arm’s reach, he was pulled back" He could have been trying to rescue her or be with her for ever. In both ways he failed. Which one were you trying to portray?? Loved reading the post!!

  4. Ohh so sad….he couldn't save her? Or was she already gone to the other side and he was saved just in the nick of time..

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