Blogging from A to Z April Challenge
The letter E is today’s prompt and my story begins with it.
Eyes closed, Shiva drifted in and out of consciousness with Sia’s name on his lips like a chant. Just when she was within his arm’s reach, he was pulled back and his head was held out of the water by his rescuer. His lungs bursting with salt water and helplessness at his failure, he wept.
By Sulekha Rawat
I am participating in the blogging from A to Z Challenge from 1-30 April, 2014 and this post is written as a part of that challenge. Check out some amazing participating blogs here. My theme for the challenge is 55 Fiction, stories in 55 words. I hope you enjoyed my story today.
Maybe Sia didn't want him to succeed in drowning. So her wish came true, that's a success for him, right?
Puh!! Happy to read he was rescued:-) Very emotional and strong story Sulekha! Ahh. the sea…..
Wow..brief and edgy! Loved the story!
Aah! His turmoil and his feeling of inadequacy has come out so well, Sulekha! Liked this a lot!
Liked this piece…so many emotions wrapped in one… 🙂
brief but strong. i really did enjoy ur story.
good he's saved… waiting for more
Good one Sulekha.
Sad…maybe he just wanted to get drowned…in his sorrows.
Nice one, Sulekha. Waiting for your next.
Sad..may be a new life 😀
Nice post. Very sad though. "Just when she was within his arm’s reach, he was pulled back" He could have been trying to rescue her or be with her for ever. In both ways he failed. Which one were you trying to portray?? Loved reading the post!!
Glad he was rescued. All things happen for a reason.
Wow! You have managed to say so much with so few words! That's talent. Impressed 🙂
Short and Crisp! Strong write, Sulekha!!
Looking forward for more…
Not yet time for him to be with Sia, eh?
Amazing. Glad he was saved. ♥
Sometimes you just don't want to be saved…sadness but with a big dose of reality in this story.
In this case, I think he'd have preferred not to be saved!
That was so intense and well scripted 🙂
Gosh!! He almost killed himself. Passionate love story, Sulekha:)
Short, crisp and emotional Sulekha.
I'll have to read the rest of the story. This part is very intriguing!
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Sulekhha wonderfully woven till now. I am more interested in knowing why he do it? Is it coming ahead?
Richa
That was a beautiful one, Sulekha. I could see the tears in his eyes.
*Shailaja*
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A to Z Challenge, 2014/ UBC, April 2014
What a great beginning to something we really probably have all experienced in one way or another. Good luck!
Ohh so sad….he couldn't save her? Or was she already gone to the other side and he was saved just in the nick of time..
Oh, here's the previous part, now I get it! I think I'll start with letter "A" 🙂
wow nice post in only 55 words thanks for this share.
Thank you.